Forbidden Donut

I'm in the process of writing a soft prog rock song for my band. I've already got the beat and riffs pretty good. However, I'd like to hear some opinions on the lyrics. They aren't final.

Ship of the Undead


Your gust carries ashes of the dead
Covering silhouettes of those still living
Sending their whispers through my head
Reminding me pains past that effect screaming

Appease your masters, increasing gail
Filling their impregnable sail

With scars you confess
Where the monsters rest

Sent them towards world's end

Like dawn and twilight you hide
As serfs to right their careening
Residing between the day and night
Enslave mankind for pleasing

Appease your masters, increasing gail
Filling their impregnable sail

With scars you confess
Where the monsters rest

Sent them towards world's end

With scars you confess
Where the monsters rest

Sent them towards world's end